Teaser – Untitled

Twenty dollar bills hotter than the molten gun in the back covered our tracks all the way to the border. We both laughed when she said that we’d lost more than we’d won. The bag lay open and all those Andrew Jackson’s fluttered and stared up at the sky as we laughed under the setting sun, knowing that tomorrow we’d both be dead and none of this would mean anything.

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4 thoughts on “Teaser – Untitled

  1. Dre Green says:

    Awesome! I’m excited for this one.

  2. VG says:

    love it, this could equally be a great start or ending.

    • Shawn says:

      Yeah, I agree with VG. Frankly, it’s almost strong enough to stand on its own as flash fiction [OK, it’s a little short — it’d have to be micro flash 🙂 ]. I already have a pretty clear picture of what might have happened and what probably will happen. You portray the giddy exhilaration of the couple very well as well as the urgency of the situation.

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